Its only just occurred to me what is really holding your captions back (or making them "distinctive" if you prefer). Almost every one of them, so far as I can tell, are written as first-person monologue (or occasionally stilted dialogue) by the girl. There is nothing wrong with this format sometimes, but it shows its limitations when the girl has to refer to themselves as "cruel" or to you as her "victim" in every caption. Its unrealistic, and breaks suspension of disbelief after a while. its ok to express these descriptions in the voice of the male, or even yourself as third-person narrator, to relieve the some of the expository burden that is weighing down your hot girl diatribes, which should still be the star of the show.
Thanks for your well-thought-out comment. You are exactly right that I make every caption the voice of the girl speaking directly to the viewer (there may be one or two early ones that slipped through). I chose to do that because I thought it was the most effective method in illustrating this theme (especially in the captions of someone named ptathuk who inspired me to create these) and I thought sticking with exactly the same format consistently makes it easier for readers: they don't have to spend time trying to focus on who the speaker is, and who the addressee is. That's why I keep the addressee vague: he is never named, apart from occasionally by an initial, when the girl's words would be clumsy without a name (often in scenes where a younger woman is talking to an older - often married - man). Where the speaker refers to herself as 'cruel' or to the addressee as her 'victim' are only scenarios where I perceive the girl as wanting to do that. Some dominant women enjoy referring to themselves in those terms; others may not ... I don't agree that dominant women invariably avoid those terms.
Hmmm, slight amendment to my comment above: captions are not always being directed AT the 'viewer', because some are where one visible person is addressing another, but it is assumed that the reader is present and overhearing.
Thanks for the response. I’ve thought about it some more, and honestly it might just be a case of desensitization on my part. I’ve pretty much obliterated my brain with probably thousands of pov Femdom clips, which are produced in the same format as your captions. So after a while, you get very picky about verisimilitude and exhausted with recurring themes and tropes. So when I read captions, which are more varied and often more imaginative than videos, It’s sort of disappointing to see the same narrative constraints of video being so faithfully reproduced in text.
I’m convinced that even just a few sentences of third person description in its own paragraph (maybe with a different text color, or even adding quotations marks to the girls lines) would help to leaven the dense monologue, and give it more imaginative depth. I encourage you to just give it a try if you are ever feeling a lack of inspiration.
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ReplyDeleteIts only just occurred to me what is really holding your captions back (or making them "distinctive" if you prefer). Almost every one of them, so far as I can tell, are written as first-person monologue (or occasionally stilted dialogue) by the girl. There is nothing wrong with this format sometimes, but it shows its limitations when the girl has to refer to themselves as "cruel" or to you as her "victim" in every caption. Its unrealistic, and breaks suspension of disbelief after a while. its ok to express these descriptions in the voice of the male, or even yourself as third-person narrator, to relieve the some of the expository burden that is weighing down your hot girl diatribes, which should still be the star of the show.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your well-thought-out comment. You are exactly right that I make every caption the voice of the girl speaking directly to the viewer (there may be one or two early ones that slipped through). I chose to do that because I thought it was the most effective method in illustrating this theme (especially in the captions of someone named ptathuk who inspired me to create these) and I thought sticking with exactly the same format consistently makes it easier for readers: they don't have to spend time trying to focus on who the speaker is, and who the addressee is. That's why I keep the addressee vague: he is never named, apart from occasionally by an initial, when the girl's words would be clumsy without a name (often in scenes where a younger woman is talking to an older - often married - man). Where the speaker refers to herself as 'cruel' or to the addressee as her 'victim' are only scenarios where I perceive the girl as wanting to do that. Some dominant women enjoy referring to themselves in those terms; others may not ... I don't agree that dominant women invariably avoid those terms.
DeleteHmmm, slight amendment to my comment above: captions are not always being directed AT the 'viewer', because some are where one visible person is addressing another, but it is assumed that the reader is present and overhearing.
DeleteThanks for the response. I’ve thought about it some more, and honestly it might just be a case of desensitization on my part. I’ve pretty much obliterated my brain with probably thousands of pov Femdom clips, which are produced in the same format as your captions. So after a while, you get very picky about verisimilitude and exhausted with recurring themes and tropes. So when I read captions, which are more varied and often more imaginative than videos, It’s sort of disappointing to see the same narrative constraints of video being so faithfully reproduced in text.
ReplyDeleteI’m convinced that even just a few sentences of third person description in its own paragraph (maybe with a different text color, or even adding quotations marks to the girls lines) would help to leaven the dense monologue, and give it more imaginative depth. I encourage you to just give it a try if you are ever feeling a lack of inspiration.
Thanks for all the sexy captions over the years!